Shaer tarteeb dain.......

[Prince-Farry]

keh raha hai shaure darya se samandar ka sakoot
jis mai jitna zarf hai utna hi wo khamosh hai

 

[Qawareer]

Dariya se keh raha hai samandar Ka sakoot
Jis ka Jitna Zarf hai utna woh Khamoosh hai

next
kam hain dunya hazaro me zoak karne ko
karte nhi kuch kamal log hain karte jo

 

[Hoorain]

keh raha hai shaure darya se samandar ka sakoot
jis mai jitna zarf hai utna hi wo khamosh hai

ohh wah wah wah MASHAALLAH
sixer mara

ur turn

 

[Hoorain]

Dariya se keh raha hai samandar Ka sakoot
Jis ka Jitna Zarf hai utna woh Khamoosh hai

next
kam hain dunya hazaro me zoak karne ko
karte nhi kuch kamal log hain karte jo

Pf bro ne sahi guess kiya

aapka me ko sochne dain

 

[Prince-Farry]

thank u...

 

[Qawareer]

ho sakta hai mera thek na ho..
ap woh shair tarteeb den jo ab main ne likha hai..

 

[Hoorain]

wohi soch rhi hoon annu

maine kabhi suna nhi phir bhi tukka maari hoon ruko

 

[Qawareer]

sochen siso..

ye shair mujh pe ek dum fit aata hai..sachii..

 

[Sabah]

Oh Interesting let me add My First try:
zoak kaam hazaro hain donia mei kerne ko
log hain jho kuch kamal nahin kerte

 

[Dawn]

aapne jo sher likha wo kuch is tarha hai

kah raha hai josh e darya se samandar ka sakoon
jisme jitna zurf hai utna wahi khamosh hai

 

[Hoorain]

Dariya se keh raha hai samandar Ka sakoot
Jis ka Jitna Zarf hai utna woh Khamoosh hai

next
kam hain dunya hazaro me zoak karne ko
karte nhi kuch kamal log hain karte jo

dunya may hazaron kaam hay karne ko zoak
kamal kartey hain jo log kuch nhi kartey

 

[Sabah]

dunya may hazaron kaam hay karne ko zoak
kamal kartey hain jo log kuch nhi kartey

maybe aapka sahi ho but pata nahin kio I laughed while reading the last line
jho loug kuch nahin kerte voh kamal kasie kersakte hain ...

 

[-Mahi-]

Matlab is main worng shair likna hain fir next os ko sahi kerin ga

 

[Qawareer]

aapne jo sher likha wo kuch is tarha hai

kah raha hai josh e darya se samandar ka sakoon
jisme jitna zurf hai utna wahi khamosh hai

hmmm..shukaria..islah k lie..
main ne suna hi pehli dafa hai

 

[Sabah]

Matlab is main worng shair likna hain fir next os ko sahi kerin ga

Yes sahi samjha aapne

 

[Hoorain]

maybe aapka sahi ho but pata nahin kio I laughed while reading the last line
jho loug kuch nahin kerte voh kamal kasie kersakte hain ...

yupyyy

same happened to me while i was reading urs

in fact abhi main ussi pe comment kar rhi thi its really interesting

ye sab yoursks bhaya ki waja se unho ne aik baar muj se bola tha k jo log kuch nhi kartey wo log kamal kartey hain un k issi qol ko maine idhar implement kar diya

 

[Sabah]

yupyyy

same happened to me while i was reading urs

in fact abhi main ussi pe comment kar rhi thi its really interesting

ye sab yoursks bhaya ki waja se unho ne aik baar muj se bola tha k jo log kuch nhi kartey wo log kamal kartey hain un k issi qol ko maine idhar implement kar diya

Oh acha pir tu aapka sahi hoga tu aap comment kare

 

[Hoorain]

Oh acha pir tu aapka sahi hoga tu aap comment kare

i guess dono ghalat hon gaye

maine ye shaer parha hi pehli baar hay

khair be creative

 

[Sabah]

i guess dono ghalat hon gaye

maine ye shaer parha hi pehli baar hay

khair be creative

Yeah Maybe.. but aapka zoak k adding last mei voh bhi funny the
khair let see annu kia kahte hain..

 

[Qawareer]

main ne to is tarha suna hai..

Hazaro kam hain zoak dunya me karne ko
jo log kuch nhi karte kamal karte hain