MAA (Self Written)

[~Bahaar~]

Bahut umdagi se aapne apne jazbaat ka izhaar kiya...
bahut hi doobkar likha hai..zabardast..

mujhe ek sher samjh nahi ayaa apka..
plzz wazahat talab hai...

Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
Kar k dil pe jabr mujhe rula do na Maa,

Mujhe bhi kabhi parha hua kuch yaad aya..
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Seeny se laga k kaha kerti thi maa mujh ko
to laaal hai na sata mujh ko
pachtaye ga ik din jab main chali jaun gi
na chahty hue bhi akela choor jaun gi
zamana dikhaee ga garmi ki shiddat tujh ko
yaad kerke roye ga tu phir mujh ko
muddad se meri maa ne seeny se nahin lagaya a
ab so gayi khaak main jab kuch kehny ka waqt aya


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[*Maan*]

Bahut umdagi se aapne apne jazbaat ka izhaar kiya...
bahut hi doobkar likha hai..zabardast..

mujhe ek sher samjh nahi ayaa apka..
plzz wazahat talab hai...

Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
Kar k dil pe jabr mujhe rula do na Maa,

Mujhe bhi kabhi parha hua kuch yaad aya..




Seeny se laga k kaha kerti thi maa mujh ko
to laaal hai na sata mujh ko
pachtaye ga ik din jab main chali jaun gi
na chahty hue bhi akela choor jaun gi
zamana dikhaee ga garmi ki shiddat tujh ko
yaad kerke roye ga tu phir mujh ko
muddad se meri maa ne seeny se nahin lagaya a
ab so gayi khaak main jab kuch kehny ka waqt aya


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Thanks mujhe sarahnay k liye dost,
mera wo shair kuch is tarah se hay k:
Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
(Means meri aankhon me aansu jamay huwe hain,)

Kar k dil pe jabr mujhe rula do na Maa,
(mere dil par jabr (means zulm ya sitam) kar k mujhe rula do na Maa taakay ye jamay huwe aansu beh jayen aur mujhe thorha sukoon feel ho.

I hope apko clear hua hoga...

And Believe me apki mentioned poetry parh kar mera rongtay uth chuke hain.... Just no word to appreciate it... Khush rahiye hamesha AAMEEN.

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ahan so u r the writer main isse pehle parh chuki ho aur yhi soch rhi thi k itni zabardast poetry kis ki ho gi
its realy awesome MAAN bro

keep writing

Thanks Dear

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mashaAllah bohat impressive sharing..

keep it up

Shukriya Dost

 

[~Bahaar~]

Thanks mujhe sarahnay k liye dost,
mera wo shair kuch is tarah se hay k:
Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
(Means meri aankhon me aansu jamay huwe hain,)

Kar k dil pe jabr mujhe rula do na Maa,
(mere dil par jabr (means zulm ya sitam) kar k mujhe rula do na Maa taakay ye jamay huwe aansu beh jayen aur mujhe thorha sukoon feel ho.

I hope apko clear hua hoga...

And Believe me apki mentioned poetry parh kar mera rongtay uth chuke hain.... Just no word to appreciate it... Khush rahiye hamesha AAMEEN.

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Thanks Dear

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Shukriya Dost

Ji haan meine sher to samjh liya tha aur aapki baat bhi par ye kahna chahti hun k
'jabr aur sitam'jaise alfaaz Maa par suit anhi hote,matlab aap jabr karne ko ek maa ko kah rahe ho
khair har kisi k apne khyalath aur apni soch..
mei tanqeed nahi karahi but really overall aapka kalaam Heart Touching..
Maa ki duaaen humesha saath rahti hain chahe wo humare beech rahe ya na rahe..




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[~Bahaar~]

Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
Kar k dil pe jabr mujhe rula do na Maa,
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Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
Seene se laga k unhe baha do na Maa,
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[*Maan*]

Ji haan meine sher to samjh liya tha aur aapki baat bhi par ye kahna chahti hun k
'jabr aur sitam'jaise alfaaz Maa par suit anhi hote,matlab aap jabr karne ko ek maa ko kah rahe ho
khair har kisi k apne khyalath aur apni soch..
mei tanqeed nahi karahi but really overall aapka kalaam Heart Touching..
Maa ki duaaen humesha saath rahti hain chahe wo humare beech rahe ya na rahe..




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Thanks to let me know dear... may next time apne Kalaam me aise words se ijtinaab karunga

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Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
Kar k dil pe jabr mujhe rula do na Maa,
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Ashk meri aankhon me jam se gaye hain,
Seene se laga k unhe baha do na Maa,
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Nice changes...
Darasal Seenay se laganay ka zikar may aik shair me kar chuka tha warna ye hi likhta...

Rehta hun pareshan par waja may nahi janta,
Seenay se laga kar sukoon mujhe day do na Maa,​

wese acha suggestion hay apka...

 

[~Bahaar~]

Thank you....
But u write better than me..
After all u r a shayer..not me..

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[*Maan*]

Thank you....
But u write better than me..
After all u r a shayer..not me..

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Aray may shayer nahi hun, jab ziyada pareshan hota hun ya dil bhar aata hay to likhta hun...